留学生在撰写留学申请时普遍存在的那些问题

时间迅速……2022也是一个新的本年度，许多院校的出国留学申请也早已过告一个文章段落，据小编观察发觉如今的留学生压根不清楚如何推广自身。广泛见到的问题如下：

1.中国式家庭优秀作文，冗杂

自小院校教的创作方法便是起、承、转、合。许多人到回应Essay的难题时就打从你一出世时开始交待，等回应到难题的关键后，早早已是5、6百字了。想一想，每个院校每一次招收都最少好几千份的文档要阅读文章，假如头30~60秒没见到关键，你的文档便会被搁在一边，那么你哪有没有什么机遇呢?

2.文不对题

我国的学员经常对Essay的难题不加思索的回应，却忽视了该院校想通过那样的难题见到如何的学员特性。再不然，运用独有的亚洲文化特性，“曲折”、“模拟化”的回应，那样外国人如何能看懂呢?

3.表述过度委婉，不明白营销推广自身

这个问题比前边2个难题破坏力更高，如果你务必跟好几千名申请人市场竞争时，院校希望见到的是你能如何推销自身?什么叫你的潜力?为何院校要收你这问学员?你比他人强or不一样的地区是啥?可是，中国学生经常十分担心把个人优点变大，由于谦逊是何其的传统美德……唉!假如你简直那样想，那么你也别考虑到申请办理院校了!由于连你自己都没法高声讲出个人优点(难听点就是你自身也不认可你自己)…院校又为何收一位看不出来潜力的学员呢?

4.过多炫字

自然，一份好的Essay除开让他人能直截了当见到你的潜力及风采外，有深度的汉字遣词确实能让主审者见到你的英语工作能力。可是，许多学员运用中文的意思来寻找能够表达的英文字，再从一堆英文字内寻找看上去最难的字来用;那样做经常让主审者一头雾水，由于一些古英文字汇已已不应用;或者英语自身的含意与汉语相差甚远，让用户彻底不明白你要表述的涵意。

5.生搬硬套、免费模板爱用者

如今互联网的确很便捷，十分随便就可以Google寻找免费模板来应用。小编十分赞成花时间寻找网址上他人所共享的文章内容及免费模板;可是，请不要一昧的剽窃应用。发表文章的技巧就好像一个人的初始个性化，免费模板只有协助你针对要怎么写有定义罢了，却没法协助你的文章内容和你自身。因此花一点时间运用免费模板创建一个”像自身”的框架，才能够充份让院校见到与他人不一样的你。

讲了这么多，给个案例，我能把一段学员的初始文章段落po出，随后把小编改动过的文章段落以不一样色调po出，请大伙儿一定要先看了初始文章段落，想一想我所明确提出的难题，以后再看小编的文章段落，那样才会协助到大伙儿!

Beyond your impressive academic credentials and extracurricular accomplishments,what else makes you unique and colorful?

一位学员的回应以下：

I am a typical Chinese student,born in China and raised by Chinese.However,my parents decided to move to Canada,so I studied for one year.At first,it was very hard.New environment,new language and new friends,everything is waiting for me to get used to.I soon found my way out by joining the year book club I made new friends there and improved my English in a relatively short time.After one year,I could totally fit in and decided to stay in Vancouver as long as I can.That was when I found that my mom was actually upset in living abroad although she never told me.She stayed in Vancouver to take care of me so she had to stop her business.Also,since my dad was busy running his company in China,they seldom the chance to meet.After deliberate consideration,I decided to tell my mom that I want to go back to China.Mom and Dad were surprised by my decision because they knew that I love Vancouver,but they still agreed so we came back to China.After one year abroad,I was not used to the pressure of China’s high school any more.However,I was the person who made the decision,so I had to be responsible for it.I struggled and finally caught up with my classmates.My parents are sweet now and I am happy at school:I can not find anything more wonderful than that.And that is one thing unique about me which is the spirit of self-sacrificing.I struggled and finally caught up with my classmates.My parents are sweet now and I am happy at school:I can not find anything more wonderful than that.And that is one thing unique about me which is the spirit of self-sacrificing.I struggled and finally caught up with my classmates.My parents are sweet now and I am happy at school:I can not find anything more wonderful than that.And that is one thing unique about me which is the spirit of self-sacrificing.

1.依据学员的初始稿，这名学员想表达什么?所表述的是不是立即回应了难题?

2.依据学员的初始稿，你读到哪里才看到了关键?

3.如果你是院校的主审者，你可以见到这名学员的优势吗?你能录用他/她吗?

paperdaixie.com的essay改动以下：

What else makes me unique and colorful would be the strong capability to quick adjustment,the spirit of scarification,and the worldwide life experience.When I was young,my parents decided to send me to Canada for better education.The first year was so hard for me because of new language,new environment,and new learning.Fortunately,I made so many nice friends when joining the year book club.They not only help me to improve my English,but also taught me everything about Canada culture.After one year staying in Vancouver,I felt something changed to my mother.She seemed not happy at all because of the separation with my father and the sacrifice of her career.When I started to notice my mother’s emotion,I realized that I couldn’t be so selfish.My parents should not take any consequences for me.Therefore,I made a decision to return to China and spoke to my parents about my decision.Of course,they were so shocked by my considerate thought.But everything would be worth to have a completed family in China instead of to have a separated one in Canada.Even if I only spent one year in Canada,I felt that my life was more fun and experienced than other people at my age.My mind would be more open to new idea and new things.I believed that my quick adjustment capability,scarification spirit,and worldwide life experience would make added advances to my college life.And those are my unique values to your school.Even if I only spent one year in Canada,I felt that my life was more fun and experienced than other people at my age.My mind would be more open to new idea and new things.I believed that my quick adjustment capability,scarification spirit,and worldwide life experience would make added advances to my college life.And those are my unique values to your school.Even if I only spent one year in Canada,I felt that my life was more fun and experienced than other people at my age.My mind would be more open to new idea and new things.I believed that my quick adjustment capability,scarification spirit,and worldwide life experience would make added advances to my college life.And those are my unique values to your school.

看了小编的文章内容后，你觉得呢?开宗明义的，我立即把学员的优势点出，再一一多方面“短述”，这样一来院校的主审者会十分清晰地了解你需要表达什么，也了解你的优势是啥，你也取得成功的营销推广自身!那么一来，院校也难以不考虑到收你咯!

发表文章的技巧百千种，关键的就是你一定要先清晰的问一下自己，你要让院校了解哪些?不要担心你的在学校考试成绩不太好，不必苦恼你没有一切象征性的荣誉证书或奖牌，更不必随便的小看个人优点;由于，每一个人全是独一无二的。